Today's writing prompt: write a scene that involves the scent of a teenager. You decide what that means. Here's what came:
Smells Like Teen Spirit
I almost forget what it’s like to be a teenager. Gone are the days of 16 Magazine, Friday
Night Videos, acne, slouch socks to shield my thick ankles, baggy shirts to disguise
my quickly changing body and Jovan Musk permanently embedded in my skin to hide
profuse sweating. I was a tidy kid,
respectful, didn’t talk back to my parents for fear of a back-hander and I did
well in school and was proud of it, quick to rub my friend’s noses in it
because when you’re a kid, everything is a competition, right?
I am reminded of these things when I enter my 13 year old
niece’s bedroom. If I could take you
back in time to my teenage bedroom, you’d see my bed centered in my room, brass
headboard, girly linens, a million tear-stained pillows to throw my dramatic
face in when things didn’t go my way, walls papered with posters of 80s icons,
Duran Duran, Culture Club, Michael Jackson, Madonna, INXS and everything in its
right place. The deal was I wasn’t
allowed to hang my posters unless my room kept clean at all times and I kept my
grades up.
Entering Holly’s room is a literally an enter at your own risk situation. When I think of younger teenage girls, I imagine
soft and vibrant contrasting pink hues, fuzzy stuffed things, pretty jewelry,
fashionable clothes, perfume, and diaries with little skimpy locks, palates of
cheap make-up, maybe One Direction and Pretty Little Liar posters. It’s fair to say that Holly’s room is a
science experiment. Opening the door was
an immediate struggle. A mountain of wet
bath towels hindered my entrance into the hazy dim lit room, “Holls, are you in
here?”
“Over here,” she says shooting her hand up from behind a
stack of school books and other junk that is supposed to be her desk, the one I
passed down to her from my trendy teenage boudoir, “doing my math homework
before soccer practice. Are you gonna
come?”
I am aghast at the smell that stings my eyes and offends
my nose. What the hell is that smell?
“Of course I am.
Finish up your homework, dinner is almost ready and then I’ll drive you
to over to the field.”
I couldn’t risk being exposed too much longer; the odor
would have ruined my appetite. I take my seat back at the kitchen table
where my sister Lara is preparing dinner, “What is that pungent odor in Holly’s
room!?
She half laughs and then scowls, “Let’s see, probably a
combination of dirty dishes, half eaten things, soccer cleats, wet towels, the
dollar store rip off of Davidoff’s Cool Water perfume and a month’s worth of
filth, sweat and farts.”
“I don’t understand.
You leave her room like that!?”
“You know, my daughter is a lovely girl. She’s bright and focused on her school work
and on the soccer field, she’s sensitive and for the most part she’s responsible
but the truth is she’s a slob. And, she’s
thirteen now, I refuse to pick up after her.
If she wants to live like a miscreant so be it. ”
“It smells like something died in there. I almost fell over. I couldn’t believe the mess in there, the
piles of stuff. There’s no floor!”
“I am constantly on her to clean her room telling her
that if her father or I go in there fishing dirty plates out from underneath
her bed or find creepy crawly things under a damp bath towel, she’s in trouble. She’s soon due for another major cleaning
spree, I know, it’s disgusting.”
“I am almost positive Jabba the Hut lives in there with
her. I am just flabbergasted. I’d expect it from a teenage boy, but Holly!?”
Lara placed a crisp colourful salad in the middle of the
dinner table and poured me a glass of wine.
“Teenagers are soooo much fun.”
I took a gulp, “A barrel of monkeys apparently.”
“Smells like one too!”
**
Oh, to be young again.
Happy Monday!
In propinquity,
Nic
Excellent, Nic! A hilarious contrast of past memory and present day reality with a couple of great lines thrown in - Lara's crack about living like a miscreant made me choke.
ReplyDeleteGreat work with the punctuation, too, by the way. You're getting there, kid :)
After our exchange today I took a deep breath and tried to better punctuate.
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